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heart strings connected through rhythm and measure...


carefully laden words nailed together this box
of cherished memories and love long lost.
the shining strands of gold wove their way
through the air, connecting this time
and your space in the place
where you felt most welcome with me
looking in and you looking away.
it was never meant to be this way
where pain was not a bruised hand or
abraised skin, bleeding, trickling
from veins hidden behind thin skin
and needy hearts.  The pain was supposed to
be beautiful and inspirational,
leading bloods to boil where the water
would disappear and our existence would be
left written as dried ink
in an old dusty volume left on the bookshelf
of indefinite existence.  It's not that it didn't matter
it's that it mattered and made no difference so
in the end it was truly meaningless whether or not
the blood boiled
and the heart stopped
and the dry ink was still wet.
It mattered that the story was never written and
the experiences were never truly told in all
their grandeur and splendor that
should have splashed across every page of your
   demise.
not sure where to submit this, so i stuck in in human nature. I dunno. I'd like to think it's for a story I'm working on. A character I've been working on.

just a bit of shit in the end, i suppose.

but enjoy regardless. hopefully.
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MorbidOnion Featured By Owner May 5, 2006   Photographer
"...It's not that it didn't matter
it's that it mattered and made no difference so
in the end it was truly meaningless whether or not
the blood boiled
and the heart stopped
and the dry ink was still wet."

That reminds me a bit of Camus...

I find it ironic that you say heart strings are connected with rhythm and measure, and then follow it with a poem containing no constant rhythm and measure...Though I'm pretty sure you didn't do that intentionally...

As a whole piece, I like it, although it's a bit too verbose and eloquent for something with no discernable rhythm; it makes it a mite hard to read in some places. As individual lines, some are really awesome, though I'll neglect to choose any because I would be repeating most of the poem.

I'm almost positive that none of the above feedback is helpful...Mission accomplished...
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